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Why was the old one closed?

 

Perched on their long legs
A brace of cranes are busy
Fishing for girders.

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My mother was great at Haiku, so here is one she wrote.

                     Smog

 

      Over the hill

    Lies smogville

  Smoggy Sun

  Smoggy moon.

 Useless waste

of fresh air.

An all going

nowhere.

 

 

the more I read it the more it seems like a poem LOL.  

May this one?

                                     Trouble

                         Smile at troubles

                     There only bubbles sailing on in space.

 

                          If you frown

                    You bring them down around you everyplace.

 

 

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Nice poems Joyful, thanks for posting them.

 

The haiku form is quite closely tied to Japanese, so it is hard to draw a clear line in western works, but I would not consider either of those to be haiku.

 

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Thanks seeker, as I read them I though the same thing, LOL I know I have some haiku's some where.  Its just finding them.  Please share if you have more.  

 

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@Joyful

 

5 syllables

7 syllables

5 syllables

 

That's all there is to it! :) Here's mine in 5/7/5

 

It was a long day

The weather was hot here, too!

Simmer down, sunshine! :lol:

 

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Hot breath, blowing fierce.

Look up to see no dragon.

Damn! Summer is here!

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Americans say

Haiku is in the rythm

Not the kireji

Edited by mererdog

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Vocabulary

I need a dictionary

Or a Thesaurus...

 

 

/  kireji

 

 

Edited by Amulet
added a link

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Faces flicker from silent screens

They are not

Cumulus visages for the supine child

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Forum arrangement:

Is it nearly completed?

Feels like forever...:rip:

 

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Long winding blackened river

Wheels revolve too slow

Why is it called rush hour?

 

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..."through sickness and health."

someone else's paradigm

is it true to self?

 

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