Rev.Fred Posted October 2, 2007 Report Share Posted October 2, 2007 less decorum than a 3 yr. oldastounding one could be so boldand if I should let the truth be toldI wish you to suffer at leastcant let it die gotta keep it on life supportbe like the astronaut and just abortyour mission is has failed but you are to blind to seefinally admitting you've failed will be the sweetest music to me.Yep:If ever there was true love in this world that would be my love for you. The pains and sorrows I've suffered just to watch you dance in the moonlight. The nights I've wept with pangs of pain from my heart over you.You are the night dancer, one that could never be touched.If I could trap your essence in a bottle I would but too strong is your essence for the mightiest metal.Long brown hair waving in the wind. Oh for just one feel of it against my face and I could die in ecstasy.Your eyes so deep and shining that I could float to the heavens with one bat of a lash.Death isn't so bad when your souls can unite in the moonlight as one Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pegasuss Posted October 2, 2007 Report Share Posted October 2, 2007 Beautiful Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted October 2, 2007 Report Share Posted October 2, 2007 ~ Fred, Hon! You're such an artist... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 2, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 2, 2007 Torment Why are the pains of love deeper than a stab wound into your chest? Most loves are easy to seek easy to find but the greastest loves of all can you make you blind. The torment and sorrow of love's nonfruition. Love's arrows can turn to those of hate. Why is it not written in the stars to be seen so easily? Fate is there but nothing is there to point you to the way. Anger brings my sorrow to a deeper level. The tides of the moon waxing and waning drown me deeper into the sorrow of love. If love were a game I'd be the best loser. A sucker for love I say. Show me the way. Tell me why damn it that no one's love can be so divine as the love I have for thine's embraces. Bewitched and enchanted not by words by but mere thought and presence. I am left to die alone but at least I will have died with the courage to stand up for true love. The purest of all forms. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
idealdabbler Posted October 2, 2007 Report Share Posted October 2, 2007 Torment Why are the pains of love deeper than a stab wound into your chest? Most loves are easy to seek easy to find but the greastest loves of all can you make you blind. The torment and sorrow of love's nonfruition. Love's arrows can turn to those of hate. Why is it not written in the stars to be seen so easily? Fate is there but nothing is there to point you to the way. Anger brings my sorrow to a deeper level. The tides of the moon waxing and waning drown me deeper into the sorrow of love. If love were a game I'd be the best loser. A sucker for love I say. Show me the way. Tell me why damn it that no one's love can be so divine as the love I have for thine's embraces. Bewitched and enchanted not by words by but mere thought and presence. I am left to die alone but at least I will have died with the courage to stand up for true love. The purest of all forms.This is very deep. Very moving. I've been there before. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted October 3, 2007 Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 ~ Fred? I honestly don't intend any kind of criticism! This is beautiful!!!I've just this sort of compulsion... {Tell me I'm being a bitch & I will leave be, honest!} I just have a 'thang' about line-breaks & such... Torment Why are the pains of love deeper than a stab wound into your chest?Most loves are easy to seek easy to find but the greastest loves of all can you make you blind. The torment and sorrow of love's nonfruition. Love's arrows can turn to those of hate. Why is it not written in the stars to be seen so easily? Fate is there but nothing is there to point you to the way. Anger brings my sorrow to a deeper level. The tides of the moon waxing and waning drown me deeper into the sorrow of love. If love were a game I'd be the best loser. A sucker for love I say. Show me the way. Tell me why damn it that no one's love can be so divine as the love I have for thine's embraces. Bewitched and enchanted not by words by but mere thought and presence. I am left to die alone but at least I will have died with the courage to stand up for true love. The purest of all forms. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 3, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 ~ Fred? I honestly don't intend any kind of criticism! This is beautiful!!!I've just this sort of compulsion... {Tell me I'm being a bitch & I will leave be, honest!} I just have a 'thang' about line-breaks & such...I don't want to and you can't make me....bwaaaahahaaa....j/k thanks Qryos I'll try to remember.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 3, 2007 Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 (edited) ~ Fred? I honestly don't intend any kind of criticism! This is beautiful!!!I've just this sort of compulsion... {Tell me I'm being a bitch & I will leave be, honest!} I just have a 'thang' about line-breaks & such...Q? I honestly don't have any kind of criticism, I just have this compulsion - the beginning letter of every new line should be capitalized, unless you're e.e. cummings.{Tell me I'm being a bitch & I will leave be, honest!}By the way - my compulsion tells me that you meant to write... {Tell me I'm being a bitch & I will leave - be honest!}...or possibly even...{Tell me - I'm being a bitch! - & I will. Leave be - honest!}I just have a thang for people who have a thang about line-breaks and such. Edited October 3, 2007 by SifuPhil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 3, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 (edited) It's not like I'm getting these published...I think they are lame as all get out. I just got bored but if it irks I'll fix no problemo... Why are the pains of love deeper than a stab wound Into your chest?Most loves are easy to seek Easy to find But the greastest loves of all can you make you blind. The torment and sorrow of love's nonfruition. Love's arrows can turn to those of hate. Why is it not written in the stars to be seen so easily? Fate is there but nothing is there to point you to the way. Anger brings my sorrow to a deeper level. The tides of the moon waxing and waning drown me deeper into the sorrow of love. If love were a game I'd be the best loser. A sucker for love I say. Show me the way. Tell me why damn it that no one's love can be so divine As the love I have [i]for thine's embraces. Bewitched and enchanted not by words by but mere thought and presence. I am left to die alone But at least I will have died with the courage to stand up for true love. The purest of all forms. Edited October 3, 2007 by Rev.Fred Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 3, 2007 Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 But now you need to change the font to Times New Roman, 12 pt, italics on every third word and bolding on every seventh word.Counting from the end of the piece, of course. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 3, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 But now you need to change the font to Times New Roman, 12 pt, italics on every third word and bolding on every seventh word.Counting from the end of the piece, of course.I can be a smartass too..... Got all but the 12 hahaha Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 3, 2007 Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 (edited) Wow~I am impressed!Now see how much more avant garde that looks? Seriously - I love your stuff - you have a dark side like mine... Edited October 3, 2007 by SifuPhil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whirling Dervish Posted October 3, 2007 Report Share Posted October 3, 2007 I liked it the first time... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted October 4, 2007 Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 ~ Okay... I apologize for intruding. I shouldn't have, you're quite right. I'm sorry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 4, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 ~ Okay... I apologize for intruding. I shouldn't have, you're quite right. I'm sorry.I said no worries Qryos.....seriously it was helpful! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 4, 2007 Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 Q, you know I'm just kidding around.I hope. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 4, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 Q, you know I'm just kidding around.I hope. See now this is where I wish Theresa was here to tell you to go to her room..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 4, 2007 Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 See now this is where I wish Theresa was here to tell you to go to her room.....That's OK - I know the way by now... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Verisoph Posted October 4, 2007 Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 less decorum than a 3 yr. oldastounding one could be so boldand if I should let the truth be toldI wish you to suffer at leastcant let it die gotta keep it on life supportbe like the astronaut and just abortyour mission is has failed but you are to blind to seefinally admitting you've failed will be the sweetest music to me.Yep:If ever there was true love in this world that would be my love for you. The pains and sorrows I've suffered just to watch you dance in the moonlight. The nights I've wept with pangs of pain from my heart over you.You are the night dancer, one that could never be touched.If I could trap your essence in a bottle I would but too strong is your essence for the mightiest metal.Long brown hair waving in the wind. Oh for just one feel of it against my face and I could die in ecstasy.Your eyes so deep and shining that I could float to the heavens with one bat of a lash.Death isn't so bad when your souls can unite in the moonlight as oneLovely work, Fred!I especially like the second - very haunting imagery. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Theresa Posted October 4, 2007 Report Share Posted October 4, 2007 That's OK - I know the way by now... I should hope so after all these years.Now get in here! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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