Qryos Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 Laying broken in the soft rain, So close but now forever out of reach... What was once my dream is put out, A candle wasted by a hurricane.I'm left with this dark glowing pain, A deep sea-monster rotting on the beach... This mirror shattered with a shout, So now my world is twisted and insane.Wrapped and coiled within this chain I am damned to eternally beseach... Why and how this all came about, My mind is yet now forever constrained. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RevRainbow Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 I enjoy the imagery and emotion of the text, sad tho it may be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted April 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 30, 2008 ~ Thank you {Our son is an ever-more inspiration }Not really happy with the last 2 lines... It's why I like free-form more often. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev. Gregory Kensbock Posted July 14, 2008 Report Share Posted July 14, 2008 Pretty good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Argonious Posted July 14, 2008 Report Share Posted July 14, 2008 Very Nice Imagery, the inspiration is definably felt, in this poem. I love the aspect of the duality to it, in that of this world and the minds eye and world.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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