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~ No body's home

Empty scattered windows

Scarred and brittle doors

Hollow weeping shadows

Fragile torn-up floors

Corners holding darkness

Echoes left behind

Walls that keep in sadness

So we are not reminded

of

Empty scattered choices

Scarred and brittle goals

Hollow weeping voices

Fragile torn-up souls

... Any assistance would be much appreciated!

Don't intend to annoy! Just a thought...

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~ No body's home

Empty scattered windows

Scarred and brittle doors

Hollow weeping shadows

Fragile torn-up floors

Corners holding darkness

Echoes left behind

Walls that keep in sadness

So we are not reminded

of

Empty scattered choices

Scarred and brittle goals

Hollow weeping voices

Fragile torn-up souls

... Any assistance would be much appreciated!

Don't intend to annoy! Just a thought...

I see levels of meaning in your words Qryos, Yet it feels as if there is something left unsaid. I like that, and I think your effort is greater for that trait... Well done ... the break in meter in at the end of the second stanza was an honest choice, we were warned of it's presence in the first, but it still made me stop and begin again... I feel that which you project - and that speaks of success in your intention... again, well done...

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