Qryos Posted December 3, 2009 Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 Speaking to a violent sea and receiving peace, My soul has been washed and released.I may be a stone at the shore, Yet I have shifted tides And the tides touch all. Any suggestions? I do appreciate criticism, seriously! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grateful Posted December 3, 2009 Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 my only suggestion would be to acknowledge your gift; of the dream and the words that came from it! lovely Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bluecat Posted December 3, 2009 Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 Yes, that is lovely. Nothing to change there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
idealdabbler Posted December 3, 2009 Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 (edited) Wow. That little change made all the difference in the world. It gave me shivers when I read it just now. Love, Tom Edited December 3, 2009 by idealdabbler Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RevRainbow Posted December 3, 2009 Report Share Posted December 3, 2009 I likes it the way it is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
grateful Posted December 4, 2009 Report Share Posted December 4, 2009 (edited) I just thought of something, Qryosand wanted to tell you (since you have that pile of cuties ) that when I read your words, I was immediately reminded of one of my most important books - a mainstay in my classrooms over the years(official, traditional classrooms and itinerant variations all the same)the story was The Whales Song by Dyan Cannonit is as appealing and important to the adult who is reading it as it is to the childcuddled in your lapLily's grandmother was so wiselike you, she heard the message of the "sea', and she received a giftand was able to pass that gift on to her grand-daughterthere's no denying magic of sorts if you find it, see if you want to read it to your girls; I don't think you'll be disappointed! (wink) Edited December 4, 2009 by ministermom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted December 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 4, 2009 ~ Thank you everyone! I will look for that book mom, thanx for the suggestion Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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