~ A Testing Thing...

[Qryos]

~ Just working with an annoyance... Suggestions?

What was lost Is

Found the whats and whos

To say it's past or presence

Given or taken away to the where

Are we going to know the way

Ward the paths we trace

The pattern was etched golden

Rules no longer apply

... I know, it's an oddness. Sorry.

[Bel]

But I like the oddness, makes me think.

[Whirling Dervish]

But I like the oddness, makes me think.

Qryos is way to cool that way. She breaks my brain.

[Phillipe]

The cadence of it makes me uncomfortable.

Thank you.

[Call me Flower]

Claire,

Did you know that poem is a very ancient Rune? You did a great job of writing it.

[SilverRose]

[Qryos]

The cadence of it makes me uncomfortable.

Thank you.

~ Just wondering, is the 'Thank you' for making you uncomfortable?

I do have other oddness that would probably make ya chafe!

If ya want.

Thank you for the replies & encouragement!

I was trying something with the line-breaks & common phrases obviously.

What was lost Is

Found the whats and whos

To say it's past or presence

Given or taken away to the where

Are we going to know the way

Ward the paths we trace <'all> instead of 'the'>

The pattern was etched golden

Rules no longer apply

What was lost Is Found

the whats and whos To say it's past or

presence Given or taken away

to the where Are we going to know the way Ward

the paths we trace The pattern was etched <'all' instead of 'the'>

golden Rules no longer apply

... Hmmm, need to change some, huh?

I do doodle along with my babble... Sorry to be a bother!

[Phillipe]

~ Just wondering, is the 'Thank you' for making you uncomfortable?

I do have other oddness that would probably make ya chafe!

If ya want.

Poetry, like many other forms of writing, should be a tool not only for making one feel good, but also one for making one uncomfortable. If one is never uncomfortable, one will never seek to improve themselves by self-examination.

Therefore, I thank you for making me uncomfortable, since it forces me to re-evaluate who and what I am and what I do.

[Qryos]

~ Wooo! I did all that???

You're welcome

[Phillipe]

You did all that and more, m'lady.

[Qryos]

~ So, have you read the poem I made for my Father?

That's an uncomfortable bit for most.

[Phillipe]

Oddly enough, that one doesn't affect me on such a visceral level - maybe because I see a lot of myself in it.

[idealdabbler]

Kinda sounds like a word salad. No matter how you toss it.

Could you pass the bleu cheese, please?

You're absolutely right, however, in your aproach to experimentation. You gotta get away from the predictable sometimes.