Fawzo Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 My soul once danced among the starswhere love is all you need.And there they met my soul and yoursand hope began to breed.And Oh a light began to shine,the likes heaven rarely sees.My love for you grew bright and strong,but it was only me.I screamed I danced I laughed I cried,I got down on my knees.I prayed to God that you'd be mine,He gave no gurantees.So now my soul shines all alone,My heart lost in a dream.My soulmate gone and darkness reigns,Just wishing on moonbeams. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bel Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 I like it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fawzo Posted October 10, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 I like it.Thanks revbel!I enetered it into a contest about 30 years ago and it won the $50 first prize. Too bad I never saw the $50. The newspaper editor said someone broke in and stole all the poems and the money. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rev.Fred Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 Bummer about the prize. If it's any consolation, I really liked your poem. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whirling Dervish Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 I liked it too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SilverRose Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 very nice!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phillipe Posted October 10, 2007 Report Share Posted October 10, 2007 Oddly familiar sentiments...Love it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Qryos Posted October 13, 2007 Report Share Posted October 13, 2007 ~ Romantic poetry is harder to write than most think, huh?You did a great job of it! You deserved the ripped-off award. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fawzo Posted October 13, 2007 Author Report Share Posted October 13, 2007 ~ Romantic poetry is harder to write than most think, huh?You did a great job of it! You deserved the ripped-off award.Thanks folks!I actually flubbed the first line of the last verse..its been ages since I wrote it. My orignal wentSo now my soul dances all alone, not shines all alone. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
idealdabbler Posted October 15, 2007 Report Share Posted October 15, 2007 The way it was posted was ok, but I definitely think the original line is better. Ties it back to the first line.Like Q said, this is a hard topic. This is well-written, and the pain of frustration comes across. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Theresa Posted October 16, 2007 Report Share Posted October 16, 2007 (edited) Fawzo, Very beautiful.Phil, I miss your poems. Edited October 16, 2007 by Theresa Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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