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  1. ~ OK, I'm gonna be a 'thing' once again!

    An 'American Haiku' is 5-7-5 syllable count

    There's nothing wrong with that!

    It's just a different art form than what is considered 'Real haiku'

    {not constrained by syllable count, but by imagery}

    Sorta like this stuff...

    Dark limbs cross the moon

    Dancing with an autumn wind

    Drawing me closer

    dark limbs

    cross the moon

    autumn wind draws me

    I'm sorry, but I'm gonna do another, I love the abreviation of it so.

    Hey! At least I'm only doing my own! ;)

    Dark is the river

    Moonlight strikes each gentle touch

    Flashing to my eye

    Nope. Couldn't do that one...

    I like that! Haiku or not, it's pretty :)

    Cherry tree blossoms

    Cascade like a brides bouquet

    Upon her headstone

    & that's truer to traditional haiku imagery...

    OK, I admit! I'm a true fan of American Haiku!!!

  2. a gentle rain falls

    golden leaves adorn the lawn

    and so Autumn comes

    ~ Yes, I'm doing American haiku {sorta}

    kitten on the bed

    needing the kneading on us

    winter's wind crying

    ... I still am a minimalist tho doncha know!

    I love the fact that it can be interpreted in so many different ways.

    I want everyone to see it differently,

    & hopefully each time they read it it's different...

    bent tree

    ripe apples


    dark water

    silent reflection


  3. "Interpretation

    Sees meaning beyond the words

    Old thoughts gain new life

    Old thoughts gain new life

    Sees meaning beyond the words


    - JohnnyBee

    ~ I call it 'Mirror Haiku' & find it a very cool usage of the form :D

    Shivering moon-light

    Shattered by the broken tree

    Silver-lined river

    Silver-lined river

    Shattered by the broken tree

    Shivering moon-light

    ~ I just enjoy it, y'know? Turning things up-side-down & side-ways is my speciality B)

    When the wind changes

    The young blossoms dance away

    Early Spring is cruel

    Early Spring is cruel

    The young blossoms dance away

    When the wind changes

  4. Not meaning to carp,

    I'm not fishing for a harp!

    And I'm not that sharp.

    {~ Shame! Shame! I know, that was awful :rolleyes: }

    ~ O.K., back to ???

    Silver by the fire

    The river passes silent

    I see your outline

    {American Haiku...

    Japanese?... a Senryu B) maybe...

    I'm just a student as is everyone else!}

    ~ P.S. Phil... that was coool! ;)

  5. ~ Oh KAYYY!!! Ya wanna play? :D

    Phil is too Chinese

    To speak as the Japanese

    So he will do these

    Western-type Haiku

    'coloring-up' what a few

    simpler words could do

    I'm sure that he knows

    It's only hot air that blows

    From old Claire's bellows!

    It's a comic's stance

    That creates this sad clowns dance

    For a smile perchance

    Please try to forgive

    The obnoxiousness I give

    With a poets shiv ;)

    ... Sorry...

    Sometimes I'm just an evil evil person :rolleyes: B)

  6. ~ Oh Phil... That's lovely!

    & if ya call it Senryu it's fine ^_^

    {Senryu is subjective haiku-type poetry B) }

    ... If you'd like, I can help ya haiku-way tho' :wub:

    Snow whispers on glass

    Cozy in my library

    Fireplace dancing

    ... Perhaps?

    cozy library

    fireplace dancing

    snow whispers

    ... I know it's very abbreviated, but most haiku is.

    {Oh, & haiku has no capitalized letters...

    DAMMM I sound like a neurotic bitch!

    Please feel free to ignore everything I say!!!}

  7. ~ Oh, if you insist Dabby-Darling :wub:

    shadow-limned hills

    snowy sunset defined

    softly grey

    above jade waves

    timelessly graceful

    pelicans soar

    an early frost

    cherry-tree petals fade

    to fall away

    ... I still can write American Haiku, y'know ^_^

    Glad to see Dabby

    Playing with his poetry

    Missed his art and smile!

    It's fun to rhyme too

    With American Haiku...

    So syllabic, true

    Yet playing with words

    Is so much fun it's absurd

    The joy that is heard

    {Yes, I'm a goof-ball

    quite frequently too silly...

    I just like to play :P }

  8. ~ Ooohhh! Dabby!!! :wub::wub::wub:

    Love ya & miss ya ^_^

    fishing in the cold

    dabbling in dark water

    ideals found


    ideals found

    dabbling in dark water

    fishing in the cold

    {Y'know I love that mirroring, Dabby! ;) }

    this brightness

    found within winter

    an ideal


    an ideal

    found within winter

    this brightness

    ... For you my dear friend...

    I've missed your wit & wisdom, ya poop! Where've ya been?

  9. ~ Here are a few of mine... they're not American Haiku {5-7-5} tho'.

    I've been working on Japanese haiku,

    which relies more on imagery count than syllabic.

    rain drops

    down a dark branch

    reflection broken

    hidden rabbit

    listens with heart sobbing

    the world is silent

    whispered caress

    leaves dancing on the wind

    breath taken

    ... I know, the last one has several meanings, which Haiku shouldn't.

    But it's still one of my favorites ^_^